holiday native

HI I had a problem from my holidays and I transformed it into a native. Look down below for my native ↓↓↓↓!

Airplane Disaster

“Hi my name is Indie, and I’m hoping on a plane in New York fly to Barcelona” “I’m going there to watch a football match”

I’m 100 meters into the flight and the plane is all fancy. It has screens on the back of the chairs. It also has Nintendo switches on it to. The games on the Nintendo switch were Mario and Pokemon.

All of a sudden the plane hit a flock of geese! We all are screaming and shouting but the pilot was calm and knew what to do. He called the airport, and they said “come back to the airport now”.
But Bob said “no I can't”.
The airport shouted back “WELL THEN WE WILL GET A DIFFERENT AIRPORT”!!!
The Pilot explained “I don't think you will be able to.
“No were going for the Hudson river!” We have one of the best pilots in the world called Bob, so we are going for it.

The plane has turned into a glider and coming down fast, and We are all buckled in tight and holding onto something. W]\e are all shouting and screaming in the back. Drinks are tipping and food is flying! “We are going to die!” I shout. “
 No were not.”

Vrrrrrrrrrrrrrmmm we are now really close to the river and about to land! “

Brace for impact!” The pilot shouts over the loudspeaker. We’re now a couple of meters away!!! Bob has to get the exact angle and everything! 

As we enter the river boats start to zoom towards as and a helicopter too. We all climbed onto the wings of the plane and got onto boats. The water was -1 degree and some people had to swim in it! d back to shore.

The plane was sinking now, and pets were in the bottom part of the plane, they were sinking! Someone had to swim into the bottom of the plane and save them! Luckily a scuba diver came and I asked him “can you get the pets in the bottom of the plane.” 

“Yes of course I can” he shouted back because of the helicopter.

 As, the scuba diver entered the plane the water started to freeze. It was  freezing by the second. He was a really fast swimmer and caught up to the freezing ice, and then he held onto the ice and the ice wasn't thick yet so it broke the ice and got up onto the ice. 

The boats were smashing through the ice and making their way to shore. The ice was getting thicker now and the boats were slowing down! Soon the boats were stuck and now we were in trouble we couldn't get a plane or a helicopter! We were stuck out there until someone had an idair. Then all of a sudden a bunch of ice skates appeared, and so we ice skate

Once everyone got back to shore the cops were going crazy and also the ambulances. The whole town knew about it because some people saw it from their office and they told everyone. So the town was there to. It was fun but scary.

We caught the next plane to Barcelona, and we got there just in time for the match. It was fun! At the end of the match I got to meet.... 

Messi!
 I got him to sign my Messi top, my poster and my shorts. “That was the scarcest part of my life.” I learnt that riding on a plane is scary but you need to conquer your fears.That was my last flight except for going back to New York.

THE END

BY INDIE

Star: I really liked how you used lots of characters on your narrative.

Star: I really liked how you used lots of detail on to your work.

Wish: Maybe next time you could use lots of onomatopoeia and fix your spelling mistakes.

BY INDIE

I had a great time working on it and it was really fun. The process was long but fun. That was my longest peace of writing I have done! What we did is we got a problem from our holiday and exaggerated it. It was fun and it tested my imagination. Narratives are cool and fun, not only cool and fun to write but also to read. We read a buddies and then did 2 stars an a wish. Ehsan did 2 stars and a wish to me.